作文讲评要点

总体评价：

1、大部分同学结构把握合理，表达清晰。

2、基本能够涵盖所有的要点。

存在问题：

1、详略安排不够合理。

2、用词和句型方面比较单一，且很多同学的表达的错误较多。

3、前后连贯不够。

建议：

1. 个人的看法不易过少，至少约50词左右。大约3-4行。

2. 整卷的篇幅不要过短，基本要写满。

3. 卷面的工整程度不够。练字，卷面要美观大方。尽量减少涂改，删词，添词的痕迹。

4. 至于表达，最基本的要求句子不能有语法错误。在保证句子正确前提下，丰富句型，使用难度更高的句子，如非谓语作状语，主格，从句等等。

语言表达：

要点1：市民们广泛认可并积极参与，获益良多

市民们：people in Xiamen, local people/ citizens/ residents

广泛认可：be widely supported/ accepted by sb.

积极参与：take part in/ participate in sth. actively/with great enthusiasm

获益良多：benefit/ profit a lot from sth.

The campaign has been participated in actively and got great support from local citizens who generally agreed that they have benefited a lot from it.

要点2：1) 每周举办公益演讲 Public lectures are delivered/ held/ given every week.

2) 建立社区图书馆 A number of community libraries have been set up to provide opportunities for readers in the neighborhood.

3) 在校园与商业中心举办书展 In schools/ On school campuses and CBD areas/ business centres, there are a lot of bookfairs.

4) 在网上和媒体上分享读后感 Readers can also share their thoughts on/ about the books on the internet or through the media.

读后感：reflections on ……

结构：主题句+支撑句

A variety of activities have been carried out in various ways.

要点3：个人看法

1) enjoy the fun of reading

2) promote the harmony of the society

3) as the old saying goes, “Knowledge is power. ”

Wisdom is to the mind what health is to the body.

Books are the best friends.

4) improve the personal qualities

提高版的句型和表达（从句，倒装，强调，非谓语）

活动提供多种形式，市民广泛认可并积极参加，获益良多

It is widely recognized by citizens who take an active part in the campaign, claiming that they do derive much benefit from various activities involved.

Citizens have taken an active part in the campaign and have undoubtedly derived a lot of benefit from a variety of activity forms

carry out a variety of activities

gain wide/ common recognition and full participation

每周举办专家公益演讲

A series of public lectures are delivered/ presented by experts weekly, where attenders are exposed to a multitude of ideas and thoughts.

建立社区图书馆

Libraries in the community have been set up, allowing citizens to have easy access to knowledge.

Citizens have access to knowledge / Knowledge is accessible to citizens

在校园与商业中心举办书展

Book fairs are open in schools and business centers to satisfy/ better meet the needs of readers of all ages.

在网上和媒体上分享读后感

The public are encouraged to share/ exchange their book reviews and reflections on the Internet and through/ via the media.

看法

Not only does it raise people's awareness of self-promotion, but it also motivates people from different backgrounds to read more books and newspapers. This campaign provides everyone with a

good opportunity to enrich them and broaden their visions/horizons.

The campaign has/ exerts a favorable effect on individuals as well as the society, for it is reading that shapes our character, which will, in turn promote the image of the city. I sincerely wish the campaign could be prolonged to further achieve impact.

The campaign has turned out a great success for the reason that…

It is of great necessity to promote public reading.